Stargazing on a Cloudy Night

I am right now at an all-night party at my school.. It is 2:23 am, and I was just laying outside looking at the heavens.. I was inspired to write, so here is the outcome.. It is in no way a finished work, so please give me some input..

Stargazing on a Cloudy Night
- Andrew Williams

Pretend, for a moment,
the sky is the floor.
Reach out and feel the heavens --
stroke the shag stratus sheet.

Pretend, for a second,
the sky is a bath.
Hold your breath, plunge below;
watch as the bubbles burst above.

Pretend, for a time,
the sky, a looking glass.
Take a seat and peer real close;
curious glances question your soul --